What do you see, when my face you look at..
Do you see my lips curved in a smile.
Or the furrow of my brows..
Or the worry in my eyes.
What do you hear, when my voice you hear
Do you hear the laugh.
Or the trepidation I feel..
Or the sob that I hold back.
What do you feel, when my hand you hold..
Do you feel the soothing touch.
Or the need to hold on tight
Or the desperation of my grip.
You do feel all of what I feel, don’t you..
And continue to hold on strong, just for me.
You do feel the heaviness in the heart, don’t you..
And still stand as my rock, weathering everything without a word.
Well!
I imagine that he sees something not-far-off from who is there, yet never quite precisely so.
The real question is, does this constitute a tragic flaw of the human condition, or the saving grace which allows us to experience mystery and wonder in this terribly predictable world?
I appreciate your use of repetition and parallelism in this piece. I also enjoy the sparing, measured application of meter. I realize that your ink is not intended for explication (or, as I like to consider it, dissection) but I like to praise the praiseworthy as articulately as possible.
It’s nice to have fresh, new poetry on the Internet for my pleasure at the click of a button. Thanks for penning it.
Respectfully and Sincerely,
-BothEyes
You ask very important question BothEyes. Definitely something to be pondered upon.
Thank you for the kind words and thanks for stopping by..
It is so comforting to have that holding hand and listening heart isn’t it ?
Hugs Comfy.
It is Misty..it really is.
Thanks for the hugs..
I’m thinking if I should copy this and tell my sweetheart I wrote this for her.
But I don’t think I should.
She’d know in a second it’s not me and then I’d get killed!
Hehehaha! 😛
See my blog! 🙂
he he..go ahead..copy it..would love to see her reaction.. 🙂
What am I looking for on your blog? Not sure 😮
Not going to copy it. She knows the level of my intellect haha! 😛
errr…no comments 😛 😛
You know, you should have a ‘Awesome’ button to click under your poems ( similar to the ‘like’ button on FB). 😀
Loved this one 🙂
I do agree with AHK…we need a button to greatly like this poem !
Who needs ‘like’ buttons when one gets comments like these.. 😀
Oh my..not even a ‘like’ button, but a ‘Awesome’ button. Thank you so much AHK, I am much honored. 🙂
Me too wants 😛 That wud be simpler Comfy, as I cannot get words to express the way u play with words 🙂
😆
very sweet 🙂
it’s sure a privilege to have that rock steady person in our life…
Definitely..A rock steady person gives you strength to go on ! 🙂 We all are luck,aren’t we 🙂
lucky I meant ! I’m feeling so much sentimental..skipped one letter 😦
I still got it Nu..so no sad face OK. 🙂
We are all lucky indeed 🙂
Thank You 🙂
Comfy,with whatever reasons you have written this..I hope alls well. Super tight {{{{hugs}}}} to you sweetheart !
On another note..this poem has also set a tone of assurance and thankfulness..which is sweet in itself !
This one has simply made way to my heart.How someone makes a difference to our entire being and is so important to us ! The feeling of gratefulness is overflowing in me for my rock 😉
So go show your overflowing feelings to your rock.. 😉 ahem
Thanks for the tight hugs..much appreciated..and I am thankful, more than I can ever say..
ohh..no hugging me back ? 😦
Oh no..how could I not..sorry sorry..maaf kar do..loads of hugs to you 🙂
aah.. first time here… and this is good… really good… ! 🙂
maybe I should copy it and use it at home… 😛
lol..what is with all the guys..you both want to copy and pass it on at home 😆
But do feel free to use it if it can get you something better than Khichdi.. 😛 😛
Thank you and thanks for dropping by 🙂
AHK & Nu, I have buttons on my blog. No one clicks them except me! 😀
ha ha..that is true Ramit..I have noticed that.. 🙂
oh really ? I’ll come and see 🙂
go Nu go.. 🙂
WOwww comfyyy… now i want a man in my life lolzzz
Go for it Dido..you will make you Mom very happy in the process as well 😉 😆
Very nice! I’m not going to try and interpret in any particular way because there’s a beauty in these words just as they are strung together.
Thank you so much D..
so beautifully expressed and questions asked… wonderful lines.. Perfect for this season.. 🙂
Thank You Soulmate 🙂
very beautiful!!!
Thanks Dew
beautifully written, Comfy…I know I’m late and all of the comments above have already said whatever I want to :D…so lemme just say that this was wonderful!..hugs!
Thank You T. And thanks for the hugs 🙂
Wonderful….full of love 😀
I know am very late at commenting, but I read this heart warming piece on the right day, Valentine’s day 😀
Loved the surge of emotions in this poetry 😀
Keep up the wonderful work Comfy 😀
Cheers!!
Glad you enjoyed it CB 🙂
Very comforting Comfy 🙂 Awww … just the right mood for a lovely day 🙂
Thanks Swaram 🙂